Subject: Fw: review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gr-description-03.txt

From: Dan Li <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 21 Jan 2009 16:02:00 +0800

Hi,

We have updated the draft-ietf-ccamp-gr-description-03.txt according to the comments of GEN-ART's review, there is no technical changes. 

We have done the following changes:
1) Added Snigdho Bardalai as an editor of this draft
2) Some typo corrections:
Nits/editorial comments:
 - 4 page 7: P2MP -> point to multi-point
 - 5.2.2 page 10: Path_State_Reomved -> Path_State_Removed
 - 6 page 13 figure 2: resoure -> resource and resouces -> resources
 - 7 page 15: travelling -> traveling
 - 11 page 17: CA  95134 -> CA 95134
3) Updated the template of Section 12 and 13, which are Full Copyright Statement and Intellectual Property Statement

The new version of this draft (04 version) has been post.

Regards,

Authors

----- Original Message ----- 
From: Francis Dupont 
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Cc: [email-masked] ; [email-masked] ; [email-masked] ; [email-masked] ; [email-masked] 
Sent: Friday, January 16, 2009 6:28 AM
Subject: review of draft-ietf-ccamp-gr-description-03.txt

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) 
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see 
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). 

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments 
you may receive. 

Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-gr-description-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2009-01-15
IETF LC End Date: 2009-01-20
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: none

Minor issues: there are 4 authors in 11 (Authors' Addresses) but 3 only
in front (first page). I am afraid Snigdho Bardalai was forgotten during
some edits...

Nits/editorial comments:
 - 4 page 7: P2MP -> point to multi-point
 - 5.2.2 page 10: Path_State_Reomved -> Path_State_Removed
 - 6 page 13 figure 2: resoure -> resource and resouces -> resources
 - 7 page 15: travelling -> traveling
 - 11 page 17: CA  95134 -> CA 95134

Regards

[email-masked]