Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-simple-partial-publish-06.txt

From: Francis Dupont <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 17 Oct 2007 17:28:07 +0200

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-simple-partial-publish-06.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2007-10-16
IETF LC End Date: none
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Comments: only minor editorial stuff which should be handled by the RFC
editor (i.e., please don't rush to your keyboard :-):
 - Abstract page 2: to constitue is not in my dicts (even I understand
   well the term?)
 - TOC page 2 and 7 page 13: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
 - 1 page 3: presentity is not in my dicts too but IMHO it doesn't matter
   as it is well introduced
 - 3.1 page 4: expilicitly -> explicitly
 - 4.2 page 6: precedures -> procedures
 - 4.3 page 7: dependant -> dependent
 - 8.2 page 14: to  Presence -> to Presence

Regards

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