Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-ccamp-mpls-gmpls-interwork-reqts-03.txt

From: Francis Dupont <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 21 Dec 2007 16:40:42 +0100

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-ccamp-mpls-gmpls-interwork-reqts-03.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2007-12-21
IETF LC End Date: 
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Comments: some editorial comments to leasve to the RFC Editor:
 - Abstract page 1: A MPLS-TE -> An MPLS-TE
 - 1 page 3: the top of the page 3 has perhaps a pb:
  "GMPLS protocols were developed as ..."
 - 3.1 page 5: is the 'adjacencies' word in a dictionary?
 - 3.9 page 6 (and some others): please introduce list with a sentence
  finishing by ':'.
 - 4 page 7: the border routers form part -> the border routers are part?
 - 4 page 7: the position of the Security Considerations is unusual but
  I don't believe it matters as soon as there is one.
 - 5.1 page 9: All three LSP types MAY -> All the three LSP types MAY?
 - 5.3 page 9: please introduce the FRR abbrev
 
Regards

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