Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-btns-core-05.txt

From: "Vijay K. Gurbani" <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 02 Jan 2008 11:38:48 -0600

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART)
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html).

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Document: draft-ietf-btns-core-05.txt
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: 2 Jan 2008
IESG Telechat date: 9 Jan 2008

Summary: This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard.

A couple of nits below.

- S1, fifth paragraph:
     s/and [RFC4301]'s concepts./and concepts discussed in [RFC4301]./

- In S3, nodes A, B, and SG-A are bracketed ([A], [SG-A], etc.)
  This makes them look like references, especially in case of [SG-A].
  A minor comment would be to not adorn the node names with square
  brackets, of if you really wanted to do so, use normal brackets (i.e.,
  (SG-A)) or curly braces (i.e., {SG-A}).

Thanks,

- vijay
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