Subject: Re: [Gen-art] review of draft-andreasen-sipping-rfc3603bis-07.txt

From: Cullen Jennings <[email-masked]>
Date: Sat, 24 Jan 2009 13:56:29 -0700

Thanks - I will stick these in the tracker so they don't get lost.

On Dec 29, 2008, at 6:42 AM, Francis Dupont wrote:

> Comments: some minor editorial concerns (i.e, to be fixed bt the RFC  
> Editor):
>
> - Abstract page 2: please remove (SIP) [RFC3261] (the Abstract is an
>  autonomous text, the abbrev is not used so is useless, etc)
>
> - ToC page 3: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
>
> - 1 page 5: this is the right place to introduce the SIP abbrev,
>  i.e., SIP -> Session Initiation Protocol (SIP) [RFC3261]
>
> - 2 page 6: the DCS abbrev is never introduced
>
> - 5 page 10: the UAC abbrev is not introduced, IMHO you should find
>  a way to introduce UAC and UAS abbrevs in 3 (Trust Boundary).
>
> - 5.1 page 11: .The trace-param -> . The trace-param
>
> - 8 page 25: ccc-id -> cccid (for uniformity)
>
> - 8.3 page 28: The UAC may also include a P-DCS-Redirect header.
>  -> The UAC MAY also include a P-DCS-Redirect header.
>  (IMHO according to the context this should be the uppercase keyword)
>
> - 8.5 page 28: .Otherwise, -> . Otherwise,
>
> - 12 page 37: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments
>
> - 12 page 37: Tung- Hai -> Tung-Hai ?
>
> - 13.2 page 38: please use the long names for months (first 4 entries)

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