Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-xcon-event-package-01.txt

From: "McCann Peter-A001034" <[email-masked]>
Date: Mon, 9 Feb 2009 17:48:06 -0500

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer
for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html ). 

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive. 

Document: draft-ietf-xcon-event-package-01.txt
Reviewer: Pete McCann
Review Date: 2009-02-09
IETF LC End Date: 2009-02-10
IESG Telechat date: (not known) 

Summary: Ready with a few minor nits.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: 

Section 5.1 contains the following text:
   When the server receives a SUBSCRIBE request (refresh or termination)
   within the associated subscription, it SHOULD send a NOTIFY request
   containing the full document using the 'application/
   xcon-conference-info+xml' content type.
Do you really want to send the full document upon termination of the
subscription?

Someone should check the XML with an automated tool to make sure it
is syntactically correct.  I did not do this.

Nits/editorial comments: 

Section 3:

OLD:
   conference instance has experimented
NEW:
   conference instance has experienced

Section 5.2:

OLD:
   received in
   notification.
NEW:
   received in the
   notification.

OLD:
   If subscriber
NEW:
   If the subscriber