Subject: [Gen-art] draft-ietf-sipping-update-pai-09.txt (resent)

From: Francis Dupont <[email-masked]>
Date: Fri, 08 May 2009 00:25:06 +0200

I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) 
reviewer for this draft (for background on Gen-ART, please see 
http://www.alvestrand.no/ietf/gen/art/gen-art-FAQ.html). 

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments 
you may receive. 

Document: draft-ietf-sipping-update-pai-09.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2009-05-06
IETF LC End Date: 2009-05-11
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: none

Minor issues:
IMHO the Abstract should be reworded a bit before publication
(RFC Editor could handle this)

Nits/editorial comments: 
 - Behaviour -> Behavior (i.e., American spelling)

 - ToC page 2: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 3: the right place to introduce common abbrevs: UAC, UAS, URI...

 - 2 page 3: UAC and URI abbrevs should be introduced

 - 2 page 4: same for UAS

 - 2 page 4: standardised -> standardized

 - 3.1 page 4: same for PSTN (I suggest in "o  PSTN gateways;")

 - 3.2 page 6: poor wording:
   "with methods that are not provided for in RFC 3325 or any other RFC."

 - 6 page 10: standardised -> standardized

 - 7 page 10 (title): Acknowledgements	-> Acknowledgments

Regards

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