Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-v6ops-ipv6-cpe-router-06.txt

From: Francis Dupont <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 28 Jul 2010 18:22:34 +0200

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-ipv6-cpe-router-06.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2010-07-22
IETF LC End Date: 2010-07-26
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Not Ready

This is the full review, I don't repeat the major issue from
the summary.

Major issues: DHC opinion required...

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2 and 5 page 12: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 3.1 page 4: consist -> consists

 - 3.1 page 4: i.e. -> i.e.,

 - 3.2 page 6: extend the MLD abbrev?

 - 4.2 page 7: W-5 is a typical example of the DHC WG concern
  (BTW I understand what 'session' means here but I'd like to get
   a better term)

 - 4.2 page 8: WAA-5 is another example

 - 4.2 page 9: aa third example: WPD-7

 - 4.3 page 11 L-14: i.e. -> i.e.,

 - 4.4 page 11: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 8.1 page 14: I am not convinced some references are really normative,
  for instance RFC 4779 (Informational)

Thanks

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