Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-turner-additional-new-asn-06

From: <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 5 Jan 2011 16:41:39 -0500

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-turner-additional-new-asn-06
Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty
Review Date:  5 January 2011
IETF LC End Date:  1/18/11
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary: The draft-turner-additional-new-asn-06 This is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
Add a comma in the 5th line of the second paragraph of section 9.  ASN.1 Module RFC 5652
Change From:    for EnvelopedData but not for EncryptedData.  The same separation is
To:             for EnvelopedData, but not for EncryptedData.  The same separation is

In the first line of paragraph 2, Section 11.  Module Identifiers in ASN.1
Change From:    When looking at an import statement, there are three portions: The
To:             When looking at an import statement, there are three portions: the

In the second sentence of the same paragraph:
Change From:    Full implementations of ASN.1 do module
   matching using first the object identifier and if that is not present
   the textual name of the module.
To:     Full implementations of ASN.1 do module
   matching using first the object identifier, and if that is not present,
   then the textual name of the module.

Last line of the same paragraph:
Change from:    need to match the module it is importing from).
To:             the need to match the module it is importing from).