Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs-05

From: "Vijay K. Gurbani" <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 18 Jul 2012 15:28:10 -0500

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-karp-threats-reqs-05
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Jul-18-2012
IETF LC End Date: Unknown
IESG Telechat date: Jul-19-2012

Summary: This draft is ready as an Informational.

Major: 0
Minor: 0
Nits: 4

Nits:
- S1, last paragraph has a spurious ":
  s/in their usage."/in their usage.
- S1.1, in the description of Traffic Key: the second sentence is
  a run on sentence and could do with an extra comma (,) as follows:
  s/device configuration no data/device configuration, no data/
- S2.2, first paragraph:
  s/yet-best- security-possible/yet-best-security-possible/
- S3.2, under "INFERENCE", there are six sub-bullets.  The labels
  on all of them except the last one are capitalized.  Any reason
  for the discrepancy?

Thanks,

- vijay
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