Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03

From: Meral Shirazipour <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 27 Nov 2012 22:45:00 +0000

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> .

Please resolve these comments along with the other Last Call comments you have receive.

Document: draft-ietf-lisp-eid-block-03
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2012-11-27
IETF LC End Date: 2012-11-27
IESG Telechat date: NA

Summary:
This draft is almost ready for publication but I have some editorial comments.

Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 5], paragraph 4, "((i.e., a Data " ----> please remove extra "("
[Page 6], paragraph 1, "By defining an IPv6 EID Block is possible" --missing 'it'--> "By defining an IPv6 EID Block it is possible "
[Page 6], paragraph 1, "the router so to natively" --remove 'so'--> "the router to natively"
[Page 6], paragraph 1, "while facilitating its large-scale deployment"---> can "its" be replaced by LISP's ?
[Page 6], Section 4 title, "Expected use" --upper case--> "Expected Use"
[Page 6], Section 4, "Too guarantee" --typo--> "To guarantee"
[Page 6], Section 5, line 1, "allocation of a /16 prefix" --clarity--> "allocation of a /16 IPv6 prefix"
[Page 7], Section 6,  "(Locator/ID Separation protocol)"--uppercase P--> "(Locator/ID Separation Protocol)"

Best Regards,
Meral

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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com