Subject: [Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt

From: Francis Dupont <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 04 Mar 2015 16:56:19 +0100

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Document: draft-ietf-stox-im-12.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20150226
IETF LC End Date: 20150302
IESG Telechat date: 20150305

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2 and Appendix A page 11: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 2: even its meaning is obvious the abbrev IM is never
  introduced.

 - 1 page 3: the word groupchat does not belong formerly to the
  English language...

 - 4 page 5 (twice): acknowledgements -> acknowledgments

 - 8 page 8: signalling -> signaling

 - 11.2 page 10: the first informative reference is for a 2012 I-D.

Regards

[email-masked]

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From: Peter Saint-Andre - &yet <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 04 Mar 2015 10:22:42 -0700

> [email-masked]
Thanks for the review, we'll address these points before publication.

Peter

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From: Brian E Carpenter <[email-masked]>
Date: Thu, 05 Mar 2015 08:36:44 +1300

> Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments 

Either spelling is correct (also true of judg[e]ment).

grep will tell you that more RFCs use acknowledgement than acknowledgment,
and more use judgment than judgement.

Regards
   Brian

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From: Jari Arkko <[email-masked]>
Date: Thu, 5 Mar 2015 14:08:53 +0200

Thanks for your review, Francis.

Jari