Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-08

From: Meral Shirazipour <[email-masked]>
Date: Wed, 29 Jul 2015 08:25:54 +0000

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-08
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2015-07-29
IETF LC End Date:  2015-07-29
IESG Telechat date: NA

Summary:
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments .

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

-Abstract, suggestion:
"uses Trickle"---->"uses the Trickle algorithm"

-Abstract, suggestion:
"DNCP is an abstract protocol, that"---->"DNCP is an abstract protocol, and"

-[Page 3], Intro, last paragraph the terms "infrequently" and "As the network of nodes, or the rate of data changes grows over a given time interval"
it would be good to give example values or ranges to better describe what is meant by these terms.

-[Page 3], "specifies transport method"---->"specifies the transport method"

-[Page 10], "higher then"---->"higher than"

-[Page 28], "Certifcate"---->"Certificate"

-Please consider adding caption and title to all figures.

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson
Research
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