Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-07

From: Meral Shirazipour <[email-masked]>
Date: Sun, 27 Nov 2016 00:29:58 +0000

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair.  Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Document: draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-07
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2016-11-26
IETF LC End Date: 2016-11-27  (1st:2016-07-08)
IESG Telechat date: NA

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Best Current Practice  RFC.

Major issues:
Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:
[Page 1], "BSD License text as described in Section 4.e "
mistakenly the html version (https://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ice-dualstack-fairness-07 )points to Section 4 of the draft (whereas it refers to BSD licensing document)

[Page 3], "Dependant on the nomination"--->"Dependent on the nomination"

Section 3 and 4 title:  "Recomendations"--->"Recommendations"

[Page 5], Section 4, formula would be clearer if the division round up rule was specifically mentioned.

[Page 7], "Dependant of the nomination"--->"Dependent on the nomination"

Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
Ericsson Research
www.ericsson.com