Subject: [Geopriv] Nit on draft-ietf-geopriv-sip-lo-retransmission-02

From: "Thomson, Martin" <[email-masked]>
Date: Tue, 10 Mar 2009 22:59:18 -0500

Hi Jon, Ted, John,

I have no substantial comments on this document.  I see no reason for this not to go to the IESG.

One minor grammatical nit.  The following sentence parses poorly for me:

   This section suggests what any SIP mechanism arising from this 
   document might wish to consider with regard to B2BUA behavior.

The "what" as the subject of the sentence is a wee bit vague.  I'd also avoid the double equivocation in "might" and "consider"; it makes it sound quite timid - it's a little out of character.  Maybe:

   This section describes considerations relating to B2BUA behaviour 
   that any SIP mechanisms arising from this document might address.

Cheers,
Martin

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